I set my foot at the start line
From this point on now it felt empty and nonviable
From this point on now I couldn’t turn back
Looking back would mean beginning a battle field in my mind
Emerging doubt in myself, like previous times
I couldn’t bear to even picture that scenario
But it was true
There was nothing that could be done
There was no time for breaks
I wasn’t about to do that
My mindset was centered
Experiencing pain wasn’t an excuse
As the serene wind played with my hair, I cleared my mind
I filled my lungs with air, took deep breaths
I waited for the sound
That sound lent me a hand, boosting my strength and speed
I felt my blood rush through my veins
I didn’t want to look back, I couldn’t look back
Looking back was not an option
At Least not for me
My anxiety melted in my tongue that very moment
Standing in the rain, under the gray clouds, locking my eyes, I still went for it
Wind wasn’t rhythmic
But my heartbeat was
My vision steady towards where I had my eyes on
The vibrant color of the finish line caught my attention
The sound I awaited for blasted
The gun was fired, I pushed my hands off the ground as quickly as possible
Pushing all my weight off the ground, I went
Nothing else could of satisfied me any more
Passing, 4, 3, 2, 1, eventually I was number one
My heart, pumping, blood rushing, giving me anxiety
Applying all skills, I have been waiting for this moment
I waited, trained, hurt, for this race
Final step, right foot crossed
I never thought
And I did it, I got to the finish line
I then realized, I managed this mental case
It wasn’t about my speed, but what I did to make it that way
Did I really just do what I pictured myself doing?
I did what I set my mind to
I was proud of my aching muscles, I won the race.
A Diligent Mind 
The way you wrote this poem in a free-form style is extraordinary. It contains many memorable lines that are very much relatable. “That sound lent me a hand, boosting my strength and speed,” this line, in particular, is very appealing. The reason being is that, as a runner, this gave me the feeling of an epiphany. I realized that waiting for the sound of the gunshot for a race does not only instigate a nervous feeling. But, it also brings out the strength in a runner, as their senses try to pick up the sound. They also use the sound as consent to let out the burning fuel that accumulated from waiting. This was not the only appealing line, as mentioned, you have a lot more.
Your blog is delightful and I enjoyed reading about your experience as a runner. The imagery in your blog is marvelous. I was able to put myself in your shoes, seeing the line and feeling the pressure emanating from the sound of the gunshot. This is a great piece and was very entertaining to read.
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Thank you for the positive feedback! I’m glad you can relate to my prompt, and pointed out the effect I intended to imply in my piece.
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A strong line that was very appealing to me was “My anxiety melted in my tongue that very moment.” I found this piece immensely engaging because of the structure of the sentence. I particularly liked the structure of this sentence because you can easily imagine the kind of position you were in. I believe that anyone reading this can effortlessly understand the situation that was at hand.
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What I found appealing to your blog was your paragraphing structure and the way you expressed your story about winning your race. I also enjoyed how your writing stepped me into your position as your were at your race. Your description was able to give me a taste of what you were experiencing. Overall, your piece was a delight to read and gave me some sense about who you are.
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In all honesty, great piece Melissa. The rhetoric and detail really allows the reader to imagine your experience on a first hand personal way. I think you really explained the process of the race in a engaging way that had the reader awaiting your next move. The line that stood out to me the most was “I was proud of my aching muscles, I won the race”. This line conveyed and really molded the story as your own, because of the expression you made. Your piece definitely had my attention.
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